Terrific poem. I love the title. I liked the way you worded it.

~Twilight Starr~

Great job with word choice and metaphors. I enjoyed this, nice work.

I know I said it once, but I will say it again, you are a very talented writer! This was a great piece. I can relate to a certain degree, but can't we all? Keep up the great work.

~Arafax~

Good imagery. Since I'm not an expert, can't help in the area of critiquing "free verse".

Wow. God really has blessed you with the gift of writing. This piece was so powerful and you described everything so well. I was going to point out some of my favorite lines, but I couldn't choose just a few-I loved the entire thing.

Interesting poem, I like it. It works very well even without rhyming, the emotion and images are enough to carry it along and keep the reader's attention. I can relate, and it doesn't seem cliche. I will definitely be reading more of your work, keep writin!

I think this is a great free verse poem, especially seeing as it is your first attempt. I love the imagery and the emotion in this piece. Great job.

I like it.

You've got the emotion ...Envy robs of all joy, all the flavor in my own life. All I can see are my weeds - and their flowers.

Great read

nice. you should definately try some more free verse, though don't lose what you have in your original poetry. :) it's awesome to see you starting to branch out into different styles. keep it up!

*breathless* That was really good! I think that you should keep doing this style of writing as well as the usual quatrain style. I love the way that you described the feelings; it was like you could see what was going on. That is a true achievement of a writer. Keep up the great work! lol sam

Oh...I've followed your work for quite some time now and I would just like to start by saying I can see so much progress in your work! You should really be proud! Furthermore, for this being your first try at free verse, this is really impressive. I hope you continue with this. I think being open to different types of poetry - and not giving up on them when it's a hard start - is the best thing a poet can do for their writing.

Great poem. What really stands out to me about this piece is the imagery and color - not just black, either. You really do a nice job wholely and completely describing your subject. Keep writing! -s.