This sounds really funny! Hope to see the first chapter soon!

Dude. This is like great! I love this idea! I can't wait for the next one! I would love to read more of this!

I liked this a lot, in fact I do not think I could do any better. You might want to show what Naizen is like, or what he looks like by having him do something a simple as a smile and having a girl go weak kneed. You know, show don't tell. But this was good! I liked the title, and the summary. Instant fav!

If you don't mind, could you read my manga, Galaxy Warrior Shon? You don't need to if you don't want. Its kind of hard to get reviews at this site, so I thought I'd ask some talented writers what they thought of this. Thanks either way.

Good luck, and I hope to read more of your wonderful Work! Honestly your writing kind of reminds me of james Paterson when he writes the Maximum Ride books! Wonderful! ^^

wow. the main character has personality. haha. i love the story. you got me by the summary. this is both original and endearing. ^^ definitely i will keep up with this. which then leads me to the point. your ability to develop characters is magical, and although the work lacks description, this is only the first chapter. and certainly this is a interesting story. i expect nothing less on the next post, and thank you for a short delightful read.