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| xx-cronopio-xx 2006-10-23 ch 1,  | abuseOh, God, I love this - particularly the "shoe-buying thoughts" line. So original. The only phrase with which I was not comfortable was "your discerning aura" - I think "your discernment" would work much more effectively in that context than the former.Once again, splendid job. Adieu, Kat |