Sorry, I swear I'm trying to help and that I'm not being rude with my critiques (I won't be offended if you ask me to stop reviewing. Some people like criticism, some don't) but the whole 'anyways' thing is driving me nuts. All your characters say it, and I can't think of a single person I know over the age of 13 who uses 'anyways' and 'anywho' over 'anyway' and 'anyhow'. I can picture characters who are trying very hard to be cute saying it, but I really don't think it suits most (if any) of your characters at all. Especially as lot of them are quite anti-social, and that kind of habit is one that you pick up off your friends. It's just not grammatically correct.

I thought it suited Jon a little in your other story, but not really the rest of them.

To be blunt, your punctuation is terrible and some of your sentence structures and word choices so bad that I find myself rearranging them and rewriting them in my head as I read.

And yet... this is one of the best stories I've read on this site in a long time. I love the characters, I love the dialog, and I love the pace. They completely rule out all the technical mistakes. It might be too early for me to say this, but I think, with a bit of editing and rearranging, you could definitely get something published.

Whoa, haven't talked to you in like forever. :O How you been!?!??!#?@$


and yay I missed this story. x)

Well even though it took you forever and a day to update, it forced me to re-read the previous chapters, which is an amazing time-consumer! you said not much happened in this chapter... but it progressed the plot more (yay plot-progression)! Thank you for updating and update again soon!

Right?
~F-J

No! No more chapters here! Dammit! I was really enjoying the story. I like the characters very much. They are really developed. Good work!

Man, I need a quick update. Waiting for the next chapter...

Beautiful story by the way. Just write the next one fast

I love Rachel! Seriously, she's just like one of my friends. I met her (my friend, not Rachel...seeing as Rachel's fictional, I have not met her) because she jumped on one of my friends and kissed him, explaining that it was a beautiful day. She didn't know who he was, but apparently she was in the mood. And you don't really care about my personal life.

I really like the start to this story I hoe it gets finished

I'm glad Michael left the party. I would have done the same, parties are just... meh.

I hope you update soon! I love this story ^_^

xD Rachel is being a bit of a stalker!

I loved the little flashback with Michael, Emily, and Amanda xD Too bad Emily had to move.

And Michael's first party?? This should be interesting!

Ha! Stoner cheerleader xD
I probably wouldn't have taken her serious either. I actually kind of like her though... for now.

I like tofu! But when it's in soup, not so much by itself.

hahaa

Kara killed Lucas' tarantula xD
I don't blame her though... spiders are disgusting. I did like his name though, it was interesting xD

I love Lucas!
hehe. Off to read more!

Sorry for the pause in my reviews!

I like Lucas' mom. She's sweet ^_^

I think it's an interesting idea to make Michael lack of emotion. I could tell by the way you wrote the first chapter! I thought it was great :)

I was so sad that peter didn't survive :(
But maybe now Michael and Lucas will be friends?!

I saw you had reviewed me a while ago and I wanted to return the favor!

I love it already! It's different than what I've read lately. I love Michael's subtle humor xD

I'm going to continue!

...I like how he is slowly slipping towards being BAD :) It is very interesting to read...

That was pretty harsh that his uncle died and I wonder when it will really catch up with him...

Really awesome story!