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| hears-wakes 2006-09-18 ch 1, | abuseGreat story - it reads like a screenplay. You have so much good dialog (which I suck at). I really like the character introduction in the beginning - you give us a good sense of her without awkward plot devices - and I think that's pretty hard to do. Great job!PS - it's a little suspicious though that your dark haired, oversized sunglass wearing 'punk' heroine is named Rachel |
| addicted2storiz 2006-06-22 ch 1, | abuseTotally deserves more reviews! This was amazing. Hysterical! I loved it. Excellent one shot, and it was just the right length. Nice job.Much love, addicted2storiz |