hey babe i like this story it grabs you and once you start it you have to finish it. you're a born writer!!

. . . creepy. Dolls always scared me. expecally china dolls. I kinda like how it ends. . . though it is kind of depressing. Why did her adopted mother leave her? That part seemed a bit iffy. But I liked the rest. I can't right short stories. I keep dragging things on until it's a big mass of nothing.

hmm . . . i don't like it as much as the first two, but i don't hate it.you don't have to rewrite it. it could be better with a few more details, adn maybe a bit more dialouge. but not too much more, seeing as i can picture everything in my head (which is good; Matt didn't even have to explain any of it to me).Well, i hope you keep going, but since i don't have an account here, you'll have to email me and tell me when you've updated."joyful, joyful, we adore thee, something, something, bla,bla,bla! Um, hearts and hands like to eat lambs, come join us in our derrierre! THE ENDthank you, thank you!" (bows and accepts flowers)

That was pretty awesome and really creative. The ending was well-written but the beginning and some of the middle needs some work since it seems a bit too rushed.

However, I like it. I really do.

Wow, I really liked the ending. I was a little aprehensive when the fairy showed up, but what ended up happening made it worthwhile to read. Maybe work on dragging it out a bit more, if you know what I mean. But otherwise it was very good! I hope you decided to revise it.

this was good. I think (this is just my opinion)that you should keep working on this story. It was good just only the fairy seemed kind of random but its the only magical creature i could think of. Keep it up! Can you please review one of my stories? thanks!