eh, this is rly good, too!keep writing!Liz

I like the rhythms here - but the wording is a bit confusing in areas. It's seems sort of rushed - I'm not sure if it's the mix of short and long stanzas, but it's a harder beat than most your other work. It's interesting. Keep writing!

You seem to be in an "absurd" mood.

I love the way that I feel I know this girl, just after a few lines.

Katrina