Wow. I really liked this piece. Dark and forboding as well as suspenseful. It didn't take me nearly as long as I thought that it would because I refused to let myself get distracted.

My suggestion is that you proofread because I found a few mistakes her and there, but not a lot.

Good job, as usual.

Wow, very nice. Is it just me or is there a hint of a Stephen King influence in this? This drew me in immediately. You kept me going and wondering what was going on. The true purpose of the "Fishing Things" was a little obvious though, but I guess I 'm just used to reading these kinds of stories. Great job!

Mammon