Yet another brilliant work from the mind of the master. You are so incredibly talented, Jay. I just can't rave enough about your talent. Other than the numerous slight typos in the writing, your works are virtually flawless. This work is definitely one of your best that I have read. Your reversal of mindset between good and evil is perfect. In fact, it is one of those things I have often contemplated myself. Your ingenious use of allegory also adds new levels to the piece. Overall, you are a fantastic author and a shining star among all others. If you ever need anything at all, I'm always more than willing to help you however I can. I'm anxious to see your next installment in this wonderful masterpiece. You have improved so much from your beginning works, and yet you were as amazing then as you are now. Thank you, Jay, for always inspiring others to soar to new heights. You are a powerful role model and great friend. You rock! Wes

I don't really know what to say... You're talented beyond anything I would have expected. And you have an awesome cool beta ;). I am thoroughly intrigued by this story, and can't wait to read more.

Things are moving, I hate to see the triplets hurt in anyway, and Firefly is so damn cute! Anyways I'm hooked, but then you knew that already.

I look forward to the next chapters!

Talk to you soonDark

Oh nice, I like the triplets, Firefly sounds adorable, and the girls sweet. I like the captain too, the airship captain. I hope to see more of this soon.

Sorry it took me a while, I was on my way out, and then a huge storm moved in, and i'm just getting things done.

Anyways, love the story! love the Characters! love the plot! Love it all!

Dark

Nice, love the ending to this chapter. Hum, wonder how it'll turn out. Probably not very well for the bad guys!

Dark

I like this so far, it was a great introduction to the story. I'm looking forward to moving to the next chapter.

Dark

Hmm... you explain a lot all at once, and I honestly couldn't tell you if it has a good or bad allure; just that that's what you do. I assume it's just to help things move along (I probably do it, too!) so I read it while singing to myself (don't ask) and start to fall in love once I get through about half of it like. Oh gosh, what's gonna happen next.

Okay, well, this is gonna be a shorter review, because I have stupid boys trying to talk to me, and all I can remember is how much I hate having to listen to them talk about themselves... And my parents are poking at me. O_< I get very pissy when they do that.

Well. Give me an update when you post Chapter Three so I can get all excited and read it.

Much love.

Can we say love?

Jay, your mind is so beyond comprehension that it sort of makes me wanna pick you apart and analyze you. Maybe I'll become a psychologist just so I can do that, but for now I just have to settle back in my nice little chair and stare at my computer screen like O_o because, right now, you astound me.

You create your own worlds within your writing, and yet all at the same time, it reflects so much of what is real that it's so... damn believable. Plus, you little history buff, you combine so many cultures and beliefs that I think you'd make a history professor cry. Literally.

And. Effing sweet - your world...it has airships. You ... just rock.

Okay. So, if you've never read the Black Jewels Trilogy, you should. This kind of reminds me of it in a way that makes me want to gobble your story up. I love the near antiheroism of the fact that the heroes are symbolized by fire and the villians the church. (Of course, history does sort of point us in that direction ... Just look at the early Christians who slaughtered freaking everybody.)

Anyway, long point short: You're a genius, and don't ever stop writing.