I saw you had no review for this poem so i thought i would review you. This is really good. I like how this is personal and how you've made it so its like a group feeling with the 'we're tired' etc. The repetition of look into my eyes makes the message of the poem get across making it more powerful, great job :D p.s update ur story Being there because 1.Its great and 2. I wanna find out what happens lol :D -Alyssa