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| Amalia Jagd 2006-06-24 ch 1, | "Guns are useless/Knives don’t hurt/Tell me please/Does death hurt?" those are good lines - you build up to the worst of possibilities... then you end it with a question... and im thinking it's rhetorical. and plus you ended the whole thing well! good poem you have here! |
| EyesAreTheWindowsToTheSoul 2006-06-24 ch 1, | B-E-A-UTIFUL! i love its so pretty & dark but i think dark is pretty! love how its written... |
| verifyme 2006-06-24 ch 1, | The rhyming at the end was great. Nicely written! |