This is a pretty decent tale, well paced and well written for the most part. The ending was a bit off though, left me wanting to know what else is going on.

There are bits of the tale that don't really scan, like the whole point of the garden is not sufficiently explained to make any real sense.

For the most part though it does enough to keep the attention.

Spawny

That's pretty good, if a little heavy-handed. A different viewpoint.

Wow. This was a really interesting story, and an impressive allegory. Many props. :)