 Raven's Pen 2006-06-24 . chapter 1a few details of your story are wrong...and i was quite astounded that you said "assignation" instead of "assassination" in your summary considering that is the topic of your story. besides the careless mistakes, i wasn't very impressed anyway, because the structure of your chapters were very simplistic. it had a "this happened at such-and-such-time, then this happened, and then i did this" with a little bit of struggling dialogue in between |