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Reviews For: Stitched Pattern

poisedtokill 2007-03-20 ch 1,	abuseI absolutely love your style. It’s very surreal… or something. The characters are very easy to get involved in. Also, this might seem strange, but you’re very good at justifying their feelings. I’m empathetic towards Vincent’s irritability. ^^ Fantastic job!
temerity 2006-09-07 ch 3,	abuseWOW.Your writing is very good! The characters are strongly developed and the chapters have the necessary ups and downs that pull readers along. Thank you for your review :) I definately want to check out more of your work.
chibicherrychan 2006-07-09 ch 3,	abuseI like Vincent! I like how he's saying he's gonna be a new man now that he's geting a second chance (after all people do change drastically everyday after tragic events) and then he concludes that's it's just not happening! Resolutions never do stick for long! He's got attitude; it's nice. Yeap, loved this chapter! Cheers!
chibicherrychan 2006-07-09 ch 2,	abuseHey ya! Got some weird comments, didn't you! No worries, that person just has to be a guy to think that girls don't burst into tears for things like death. Add shock to it all, and this situation is plenty enough to justify some heavy crying. It's quite normal to be sentive to this kind of thing... Now, I'm probably gonna sound like a complete idiot, but when did you ever say Zach has cancer? He's sick, I got that much; his head was shaven and he's wearing a beanie... Does that necessarily mean cancer? Forgive me, but I am not going to be running ahead of you, trying to anticipate just what your story will be about, but I have faith in you. I'm quite certain there will be nothing generic about it.
princess max 2006-07-09 ch 3,	abuseInteresting. I wonder what the 'changes' will be.
Robin Siskin 2006-07-03 ch 2,	abuseI don't like how that chick almost cried when they heard the bus driver and the old lady were messed up. Unless she knew the old lady or the bus driver, it's sort of...meh. Most people aren't very sensitive to that kind of thing. When somebody dies, it's like 'wow that sucks the root,' but you don't cry. At least, not usually. Not a lot of people have the status of tzaddik, so...yeah. The way Zach is recovering from cancer sort of makes this sound like one of those really generic stories where there are a lot of 'eccentric' people of very distinct personalities in an accident and the only point of the story is to find out who they are, what they do, and the laughs they have along the way. It seems that you could focus this on so much more, but I'm not making assumptions yet. It's too early in the story to tell. And, by the way, where the hell did By Sid pop up? Your review was so random, I was like 'whoa, did I go awhoring today? I don't think so.' And then I didn't review YOU, so it couldn't have been a return review, so I was confused.
Robin Siskin 2006-07-03 ch 1,	abuseThe only major problem I see here - since it's so short - is with the old lady. You use the word white like three times in two sentences. It's not quite pleasant. Off-white is sometimes thought of as cream, maybe use that? And maybe you could not put off-white at the end of the list, that way it's broken up a bit.
Ramza the Heretic 2006-07-02 ch 1,	abuseThis doesn't seem like a prologue to me. It sounds as if you've already moved on to the story itself. However, I like the description. I especially like "The doors separate loudly, creaking with the agony of constant use." It personifies the door I guess. However, I'm not sure why you use the word 'agony'. Anyway, I've written something new. Do please critique it when you're free. Thanks.
chibicherrychan 2006-06-25 ch 1,	abuseNot phased off at all, but pretty intrigued! You just have a way with words! You describe a scene in a way that makes us clearly see the people in it and the events as if they were happening before us. You truly are blessed with immense talent, and I thank you for sharing your vision, your stories with us. So, plainly put: can't wait to see where this is going and really psyched that you aren't abandoning 'The Baricade'! Cheers!

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