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| Adenil 2008-03-12 ch 1,  | abuseWhoa. Nicely done. Only one tiny problem I have, the second to last line seems excessivly long. Just thought I'd say. Other wise, thank you for this. |
| Oracle of Destiny 2007-10-06 ch 1, | abuseHmm, that's the trouble - you don't know what will happen to you when you leave this world eventually... |
| Daphne D'Apple 2007-08-19 ch 1, | abusei love the flow of the poem =] |
| A. E. Custer 2007-04-21 ch 1, | abuseI like it but the flow was a little tough. i suggust reading it out loud and taking out a few words or perhaps adding more in places. you oculd also add more or go deeper if you'd like to but overall i enjoyed it A.E |
| KennyO 2007-02-20 ch 1, | abuseO.o i think it's good |
| CloseTheDoorToMyDreams 2007-02-10 ch 1, | abusethat poem really makes you think about death and the after life people are really scared about death and me as one of them always wondered on what does happen after we die do we live I guess a better life or do we pay for our sins but great piece of work |
| from beneath the bell jar 2006-06-25 ch 1, | abuseCool poem. Effectively reflects many people's questions on the matter. I liked the ending most. |