Wow this is completely brilliant. The words you chose and the descriptions you used, everything was just so beautiful.

I would love opinions from a talented writer like yourself on my work! It would really mean a lot.

I realize you wrote this over a year ago, but it is so beautiful, and I felt the need to review it now. The way you string words together, how they bump off and melt into each other, that is just fantastic. The last line is stunning. Gorgeous piece. Keep writing! :)

it sounds so sad, but the combination of words is so nice. so many ideas compacted into one single extended sentence.

Absolutely gorgeous; languidly beautiful.