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| Iris Early 2006-07-09 ch 2,  | abuseThe shortness of your chapters definitely does something for the choppy nature of the prose. I love the last line of this part; the solemnity of the tone really shows through. Nice work. |
| Iris Early 2006-06-26 ch 1, | abuseBrief, but promising, yeah. It piqued my interest.One thing though - and don't hate me if I sound patronising - you did mean 'emancipated' and not 'emaciated' didn't you?xx iris xx |
| TalesOfOld 2006-06-26 ch 1, | abuseShort but powerful. Well done! |