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| Der Patrizier 2006-07-25 ch 1,   | This poem, appears to be a personal one. Nice poetic touches here and descriptions of feelings. Seems to me like you're longing for someone. Keep up the good work. |
| firestar13 2006-07-17 ch 1, | hey i like that one it was good |
| Travis C. Eckert 2006-07-04 ch 1, | Good repititions. |
| darknessblooms 2006-06-25 ch 1, | It's a nice song...very cute and romantic. But the ending seems a little awkward, I don't think "gaunt" is properly used there; I know how hard it can be to come up with a good rhyme. How about using slant rhyme and saying "without you, my life would be naught"? Just a suggestion. |