The first bit, about feeling calm, reminds me of Depeche Mode lyrics somehow!

The whole thing's really sweet. I like it.

Quaint. Details though, love. It's ridiculously adorable, I tell you that. And the flow is fine...but if you had delved a little more into the abstract, I may have liked it more. That's just my bias. This is well written. Nice job.

Cute _ The ending is weak, but the rest flows beautifully. I would recommend you try and deepen the emotions that the narrator is feeling, however.

Good job.

Write hard,write long,write until dawn,TLDG