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| taste like yummm 2006-11-23 ch 2, anon. | abuse1. i love it. why'd you stop. girls with accents are dead sexy, i agree. 2. rent? |
| LEDlorien7 2006-07-26 ch 2,  | abuseOMG i am totally obsessed with Rent too! wow, that is so cool. I totally got the Rent reference there "with you?" no. with my father. hahaha. OK, this is so great. i like Brent. i like how he has Rent IN HIS NAME! clever. hahah. i like this story too! |
| LEDlorien7 2006-07-26 ch 1, | abuseWow, you sure get right into your story. It moved very fast. Actually, from one writer to another, i'd advise you to slow this part down. add some detail. Also, I would maybe let some time elapse before anything happens with Taylor and Henna. Add some sexual tension to the beginning, instead of rushing in. But other than that, i really like your story so far. I would love to see it continue. great work! ^_^ |
| lalaLAMA 2006-07-05 ch 2, | abusewhat are you talking sbout? Im not only reading this story but lovin it! Im not so sure that I want Taylor with Henna who seems kinda guy-ish, If your gonna do a lesbian pairing, make it a REAL lesbian pairing. Because a girl wearin a suit? well, Ive never seen it done but i would like to. And how come Taylor seems so ok with being lesbian, normally, when your lesbian you know it from a young age. If I was Taylor I would be at least a LITTLE confused. But all in all, a fab story that I hope to see more modleing in! update son |
| playing.with.scissors 2006-07-05 ch 2, | abusethis is so cute. please update soon |
| lalaLAMA 2006-06-26 ch 1, | abuseO M F G ! ! ! ! ! do u kno how fab ur story is? like seriously, its now one of my favorites. im going to go CRAZY if u dont lupdate like right now! |