How can you call that cliché? That is wonderful!

This does certainly have a sense of the cliche, but that doesn't necessarily detract. Quite nice.

To...damn...SHORT!

This one sorta blew past me, kinda like a UFO. You see something, go "what the hell was that?" and then it dissapears.

Unless you are doing a haiku, which is supposed to be kinda short, these little blurb poems dont do much for me.

It would have been alot better if you elaborated more, at least thats what I think.

Write longer damnit!

it's not too cliche. its good. i think its well written too. im glad you didnt add more to it... it would have ruined it.