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NChristART 2006-08-29 ch 1,	abusebreathtakingly beautiful... ps: um, maybe you should learn how to swim...! anonymousaphasia
i.am.the.winter 2006-08-16 ch 1,	abuseif it wasn't for the format, this would have been just a good poem, but the format does seem to add to the appeal. nice work. and also, "liar dying" was originally done in colour and made to pop out, so the underlines are a little overdone on purpose. but thanks for the review. -- devil in a midnight mass
diffident 2006-08-12 ch 1,	abuseThis speaks to me of moving on and finding your way through a difficult light, breaking through the fog and finding dawn's light after the darkness. It shows me a misty bay, filled with grey air and water and land and an old boat, with white paint flaking off and warping wood. Water is a powerful metaphor and symbol: "going with the flow", the sensation of a chaotic life, indifferentiated and flowing emotions, fear of being drowned by the unconscious. Water is the wild nature of the soul in need of being conquered. Water puts out fire, nurtures wood, washes away earth, and even, with time, erodes metal. Water is the essence of life. And you've taken it and skillfully crafted and gently molded it into a very inspiring poem. marie
Leaving Here 2006-08-08 ch 1,	abusei like it. your poem feels like it swims over the surface but never quite toches it.. and thats great.~Liz
Elizabeth Ebony 2006-08-02 ch 1,	abusethis piece is so vivid and lovely,i adore it.
Elenive 2006-07-27 ch 1,	abuseVery very good...strong imagery, descriptive, and moving. Wonderfully written. ~Elenive
lavenderfoxdaisy 2006-07-16 ch 1, anon.	abusethis is gorgeous, eloquent and emotional. it truly reaches the depths of the 'spur of the moment' feel you're trying to express. the title is fantastic and really innovative and the the last line leaves that awesomne feeling lingering.
Dragonzz 2006-07-14 ch 1,	abuseI love the titles of your poems. PLays on words are so cool. And I really like this poem. I got a really strong image in my head. ~dragonzz~
Nobody-n-Particular 2006-07-13 ch 1,	abuseThe play on words proves very effective, wonderful diction!
method acting 2006-07-09 ch 1,	abuseI love the ocean. I love this piece. Super job.
Moondog Dozier 2006-07-06 ch 1,	abuseThe sound and construction of this is marvelous. So floatingly audible. Great write.
breezy nostrils 2006-07-04 ch 1, anon.	abusehey jack btw wanted to let you know that i have taken Shattered Tragedies on by myself...and i finished it! unless you want to write more jasmine poems haha!
breezy nostrils 2006-06-28 ch 1,	abusehaha you're not the only one. except i can barely float - at least on my front. i love the imagery, you really captivated that moment. nice work.
Faithless Juliet 2006-06-27 ch 1,	abuseForgive me for saying so, but the beginning really didn’t send me. “Tasting the sweat of the air,/(salted heavily like/brimming/eyelids)” - Sweat of the air makes me think of humidity; those hot summer days when just physically moving through air makes it seem like you’re moving through water. “I've seen it before,/either oar building/up a foam,/with focus on horizon's limp light.” - I like the word play of Oar/Or, and the imagery surrounding the foam was lovely, ethereal almost. Interesting little piece, not necessarily my favorite of yours but still a good read. Hopefully you work on that swimming thing though. Juliet.
Astarayl 2006-06-27 ch 1,	abuseYour creation of rhythm was brilliant. It lilts like a boat on water. "there are cracks in my palms from visiting this again"- Beautiful imagery and sense of age here; worn down palms and repeated journeys.. I just love this phrase. "the sky is savoury tonight"- I absolutely love this line, partially due to the fact that I enjoy saying that air smells delicious, and whatnot xD And the use of water-linked words did help immensely to tie it all together. Great work.

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