woww... ur story is amazing!! I've only read the prolouge and I already want to read it... I have a question. How did you capture the feeling of a sad woman during death so well?? U are a guy right??

i only read th eproplouge today, but it was great...the language used was superb, and the way you used everything perspective was outstanding...it really sounded professional...if i were you, thouhg, i would maybe give the woman a little bit description either before or after she found the body...other than that, weel done...ill read the rest later. :)

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Your description, dialouge, and character introductions are very interesting and concise, so I know exaclty what is happening without getting bored out of it. The chapters seem a little long, and I don't think the title needed to take up a chapter of its own, but I like what I see here.

Hey, this is really great. I like the descriptions, you've got some really great writing in here (and thank god, hardly any spelling or grammatical errors.) I like the sarcasm (or what I'm assuming is sarcasm) in the "City of Peace" thing too. The only thing you might want to work on is the dialogue. Most of it's pretty good, but some of it is a bit cliche. Mostly when Anne is speaking, or at the end, Alexandra. Work a little more on developing your female characters. And is Anne supposed to be such a wimp? Just work on the characters a little and the dialogue and you've got a great story, I can't wait for more!~ Mercedes V