this is lovely. short and sweet.

I think this worked very well with a simpler formatting...the effect is splendid.

wow, this is good. i like the end result too. well done.

First thing right off the bat: WAY to short. I liked it, and when I saw how short it was i died a little inside. Your poems ROCK, make them longer damnit!

But the poem is pretty clear what its about, and once again feels like a giant slap in the face. Very nice play on the tendency of the world to resistg chance and excitment and return to conformity.

Well done! TOO DAMN SHORT!