That’s a really cool story! Well, you mixed the descriptions and narration in the right proportion giving a well balanced story. It got a flow to it. I like it, especially the contrast between the highschool student and the huntress. The fight with the Upirs was a bit too quick and I had to read it thrice to grasp it. But I think it tells about the rapidity of the huntress. Nice job. Keep it up.

This is really good! This site is good for people to hone thier skills but its hard to find a really good piece of fiction. Hope you update soon

Interesting work. Nice job so far.