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Crossing the Rubicon 2006-12-09 ch 1,	abuseI really like the first three lines of this. My only suggestion for this piece is that you eliminate a lot of the question marks. Instead of putting question marks before every 'or', it would look better to put a comma. Also the first three lines make more sense punctuated this way: "Which is sweeter: The chocolate of the body Or the blood of this soul?" Keep writing.
LeilaX 2006-11-27 ch 1,	abuseThis poem seems quite personal, there seems to be a historical element/mood to it as well, with the knight, maiden etc.
Inu-midoriko 2006-09-15 ch 1, anon.	abuseomg you could be a professional poet dyou know that? I was wondering in my future fics if i could use this poem. i'll give you full credit for it and everything. it's just this is amazing. more people have to know about it. i dunno when and what fic and this is even if you say it's ok. XD once again awsome job
Yumeko 2006-07-11 ch 1, anon.	abuseI'm surprised there aren't any reviews here already...I read this a little while ago, and thought I had already commented. Oops! ^^; Well, I'll do it now. As was hinted at in the description, this is tied into something else, and having read it, I can clearly see the hints and figure out who the speaker was. If I look at it without that previous knowledge, I would probably be curious as to what was prompting this, but not really confused by it. In a way, this has a different feeling to it, perhaps because it's written 'in character', unlike your normal works. The feelings are still there, but set at a slight remove, maybe. It's a bit hard to put my finger on what the exact difference is, but there is a difference. Despite that, this isn't bad, and I like the wordings that you used. It made it clear how things were without ever saying names or making it too obvious, and there is an element of opposites seen through it. If it were a drawing, it would likely be of someone standing at the fork between two paths - that's really the imagery I get from this. Which one is the 'path less traveled' that will bring the speaker to her desired ending? That, it doesn't answer, which makes thinking about it more interesting than it would otherwise be. On technicals, the sheer number of question marks is a bit overwhelming. One for every line might be a little too much, even if each line is asking a seperate question. Other than that, I don't see any errors in spelling, though I do wonder about the last line a little. "I only wish now I knew..." has a bit of a quirky flow to it in comparison to the other lines. It might just be the word order. I think this would work well with the piece you've connected it to, so go for it! I'll have to keep an eye on that as well, to see how you use this in there. ^^

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