That was a beautiful poem! I liked it
Great job!

greetings...

it's honest, almost brutally so but very beautiful at the same time. lovely use of emjambment, creating the 'scared' effect.
i like it, really i do.

love,
~unsociable

This poem is beautiful. My favorite part is the last stanza, it contains true, pure emotion. Very well done.
Quincy

Oh...I really like this poem.

I like the use of I/i. It's something I did in a poem myself (though one not nearly as good as this) and I think it gives further insight about the way the narrator feels about herself.

I think this ties in perfectly with Ayah in Honourshill - her fear of becoming close, of being known. What I like most about your most recent story is that it really delves into the character - Hilton Academy was good, and the characters were there, but Ayah's hypersensitivity really bring me closer to her. In a way, I can relate because even though I don't move around and even though I do have friends I've never had a terribly close relationship and while I yearn for it in some ways, in other ways I'm much more comfortable with myself and I unconsciously push people away.

But anyway, the commas break up the thoughts well, and I like the stacatto feeling of the last verse and the way the longer words beg to be spoken outloud. Good job.

hey. really good poem. i could see her thinking these points. well done.

GA

Ohg beautiful. just like your story... I love this so very much. You did an excelent job.

this is nice! it ties in nicely with the fears that are present in honourshill and the flow is nice too. i also like the last couple of lines "if i didn't feel it/at all/i think/i would be scared/even more" i like that. anyways, good job

This is a very honest, emotion-full poem. I really like the last couple of lines.

'but if I didn't feel it, at all, I think, I would be scared, even more.'

It really evokes a lot of feelings.

Good job.

Really lovely. Flows nicely. I liked the symmatry of it.