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| bleepbloopbanana 2007-08-19 ch 1,  | abuseI'm an absolute failure at poetry, so I won't try to give any critique... I'll prolly just embarrass myself if I do. Heh. But I did like this one, mainly because I couldn't just read it once and be done with it. I had to go back and consider each word and the words it was paired with carefully until I understood (or thought I understood) the context. It appealed to the brooder in me and I know I prolly took meanings way deeper than they were meant to be taken, but that's the beauty of poetry after all. Good work, and keep writing. -goes off to read one more time- -Bleep |
| Gypsy Jasmine 2007-06-15 ch 1, | abuseYou wrote this poem beautifully. The rhyming worked especially well. I rather like the line- "Bliss that strays with no restriction." Well done. -Jazz. |
| Onion Ring 2007-03-20 ch 1, | abuseWhat a cute poem about love.. i really liked it. Makes it sound without him, he/she is not complete |
| aesahattyr 2006-09-13 ch 1, | abusethis is excellent! i really like the bolded word thing, it's like two poems inside of one haha. and thank you for the review :] |
| roxaroni 2006-06-29 ch 1, | abuse>.> Hey... just noticed... you stole the whole bolding thing from me, didn't you? And... I stole that from some story I read a few years before. I wonder if they stole it from somebody? |
| A.H. Fenald 2006-06-29 ch 1, | abuseI liked it. I also liked that when you wrote it you used bold for the first word in every line. Very clever...very clever indeed. I have never seen anyone do that in a peom before. Keep up the good work! |