who cares if you could plunge un and come out perfectly dry?
thats sticking with me for some reason, like i lived it once long agao.

thisis me, jsut so you know

(sell out), that hit

Can nearly see the thoughts as they come. "(the author’s notes always were the easiest part)" is a most fitting observation/confession, and the end is great conclusion. I very much like how grasping and acknowledging (brutal and honest) this poem is.

I like your poems. They all flow very nicely and sound great. i can't really put into words the kind of compliment I was intending to write.

oh, wow. I love it! Especially "Looks good, sounds good, the motto of her life./Who cares if you could plunge in/and come out p.e.r.f.e.c.t.l.y. dry?"

Your poetry is amazing. And I'm not just saying this to politely respond to your review, either ;] Keep up the good writing.

I really like this poem. The formatting is quite unique and makes the poem kind of like a game to read. The ending is powerful. Very nice concept.

I liked the poem... but this is an example of "going easy on the formatting"? Um... okay *shrug*

But I did like the poem. It was random in a way that made perfect sense... Random, but not random. Confusing but clear. I also really liked the message that this poem sent.

I'd have to say the first stanza is my favourite. The lines "one thousand passing vapors, // and insubstantial words" was really good. It planted the poem in a firm foundation (does that make sense?) and I just found that those two lines almost gave me a sort of chill when I read them. Keep up the good work!