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| Twilight Starr 2007-09-28 ch 1,  | abuseGreat essay. It has potential. Good luck with writing and this story. Have a lovely day. :) ~Twilight Starr~ |
| RubyXSerpent 2006-12-02 ch 1, | abuseI just HAVE to fave this. It's beyond beautiful, and somewhat tragic. It's magical, it really is...It's 'Tragical!' -laughs- By the way, the title is wonderful. I love it! So dark and fairy-tale...ish. Loved it! ~Ruby |
| criti-sized 2006-07-11 ch 1, | abuseThis was a really nice story. I'm not sure whether you were going to make it a short story or add more to it, but it sounds good to me. The description in it was what I really liked. |
| drippingdreams 2006-07-10 ch 1, | abuseIntriguing! A few little things to fix: the "breath machine" is called a ventilator. Also, you call her Carla, but then towards the end it says Ara Cater. The end was a little bit abrupt, when she remembered very matter-of-factly what had happened, but you pulled it off nicely with reverting back to the once upon a time. I sure hope she gets her happily ever after! Again, intriguing story, stringing self-soothing fairy tales into an account of semi-consciousness from a girl in Intensive Care. |
| Cross Country Runner 2006-07-03 ch 1, | abuseBelow average and I'd report you for posting a story in the essay section, but FictionPress.Net doesn't care anymore and doesn't moderate FP as much as FF. |
| Bitter Irony 2006-07-01 ch 1, | abuseThis was a really beautiful story, with a sweet theme. Keep up the good work! |
| Elle Estun-Despote 2006-07-01 ch 1, anon. | abuseSomeday, there will be a day when people get it through their heads that STORIES do not belong in the ESSAY section. |
| Nehelia Silverlode 2006-06-30 ch 1, | abuseWow! This is awesome. I love the way it's written. The beginning really makes you think. |