i like it. flows really well :)

~mez~

Now, I just finished reviewing your Untitled poem, in which I criticized your pacing. This poem is exactly opposite. It flows, with a natural rhythm created by varied syllabled words and perfectly oriented punctuation. This poem shows what a flawless, superb wordsmith and verse-smith you truly are, with the easy flow and stark images you weave so effortlessly.

~Ceddy Teddy