Fantastic, especially the last line. Right from the beginning, it felt like a tall tale. Small details brought the story from mere superstition to to fantasy, and having the story be completely made up fits well with her flighty character and also demonstrates that she's got the capacity to become involved with the lives of those around her, unlike Osis.

Nice.

Hahaha now I *really* like Isis XDD

I'm an **! **!

I think that's the best one you've written so far, excellent work on the action scene, really drags you in, and nice little twist in the end. I wonder how long until we get a full lenth story out of you again. Keep it up.

Very cool story,i'm glad you went with the name Tristan.Keep them coming.