Reviews for Smiling On the Package

Damien Vlashtov
2006-09-05
ch 1,

abuseIntriguing how you say "cheers!"... Well done! I thought this piece was well done, though you could go over and improve it with certain punctuation/grammar changes. I have no advice to drastically improve anything. I liked the line "Nothing like getting your daily dose of vitamin C with a buzz." especially - it rings fairly well. Good job! keep on writing.

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