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| Jumbie.Kaulitz 2008-05-05 ch 11,  | abuseOh, that's my favorite dialouge from Alice In Wonderland! I love the Cheshire cat--he's my favorite! Great job with the story and awesome ending-- you wrapped everything up pretty nicely. |
| Tee Elle Double Yew 2008-04-05 ch 11, | abuseKawaii. Loved it. good job! |
| xbloodycuntx 2007-12-06 ch 11, | abuseAws =] I loved it all |
| xbloodycuntx 2007-11-10 ch 1, | abuseOh my god! This is turning out to be one of those stories that I didn't EXPECT to be all that great (not any fault of yours, I've just been flipping through random stories with no such luck), but it's turning out to be something no short of AMAZING! I LOVE IT! =] |
| SaraMaxine 2007-06-23 ch 11, | abuseYAY! You fixed it! You get cookies! *dump truck dumps a full load of cookies on your poor head* ~Huggles from the clan of the strait-jacket!~ |
| SaraMaxine 2007-06-23 ch 10, | abuseYou truly are sadistic. No cookies until you fix it! |
| InnocentSinIncarnate 2007-03-07 ch 2, | abuse...that's kinda creepy. Hm, well, I'm glad that the cat...um...the person that was a cat has appeared in this chapter. I'm interested in seeing what his and Yari's interactions will be like...haha. |
| InnocentSinIncarnate 2007-03-07 ch 1, | abuseYay! You have a new reader! Well, it's only the first chapter, but I'm already loving it. All the Japanese stuffs is really interesting, but you could include more thoughts, like make your writing more personal towards your character--include their feelings and thoughts, etc. Alright, on to the next chapter! |
| Anononononomus 2007-03-04 ch 5, anon. | abuseHey brilliant story so far and I love your discriptions of Kyoko's kimono's. Just one little thing I wanted to point out though. When Kyoko remind's Yari about his "date" with the girl and Nitanita is all scandalized, you said that Yari had forgotten all about his "randavuz". It's really spelled rendezvous... it's french... I'm looking foreward to reading the rest though seeing as how you've finished it I suppose you won't see this... XD |
| Lavender-Drop 2007-01-28 ch 11, | abuseThis was really cute--and informative! I really like how you stuck to the things you learned and didn’t just pick and choose--which would have been fine had you not said you wanted it to be accurate. I really like this story, thank you for writing it! |
| beloved18 2006-12-04 ch 1, | abuseme likey the story ^^ |
| Cookie Gestapo 2006-11-09 ch 11, | abuseOh wow this is such a great story. I'm really happy I read it. |
| Tisbee 2006-09-24 ch 11, | abuseBeautiful, lovely story. ^^ I read it in one sitting and really enjoyed it. Nita is absolutely hilarious, and to be blunt I think you did an amazing job with /all/ your characters. :D |
| Lady Psychic 2006-09-20 ch 11, | abuseThis was a really good story. I loved Nitanita, Yari, and even Hanamori. For a while, I was worried that Yari was going to die, so I was glad that this story had a happy ending (although it was still sad that Hanamori died). Anyways, good job in writting this well written story! |
| Starlite nightfall:MOO MOO 2006-09-17 ch 11, | abuseTRULY a magnificent story! I loved every last second of reading it and it made me so happy! GOSH I was waiting for that lime scene for the WHOLE story..lol..and I read it all at once so it took like 5 hours now that I realize..heh, it's 3:15 AM...;_; my poor eyes!...^_^ It was WORTH IT! this story was all magical and what not.. well written, and I like how the whole of it just came together and everything was perfectly timed... HANAMORI! aww.. |