Wow. I love this. It's a piece all about rhythm, and the rhythm in this one is perfect. You picked such fantastic words to repeat, and your word choice overall is so stunning. I am totally in love with this poem. I'm obviously putting it on my faves. Keep writing! :)

i like the way this is put together -- it's seemingly abstract, but fits well together as a whole. ~*

You get the confusing, drunken feel without confusing the reader... Very well done. I loved the rhythm of it all.

Wow. I love this. I'd tell you my favorite line, but the whole poem is just fantastic. Well done.

I don't get it