Delicious read.

In this line: "Which has been pined as the sin", did you mean "pinned", or was I just thinking of it in the worng way?

I loved the last line, sinful and satisfying.

~the Stranger in the moonlight~

This HAS to be my favourite of yours so far..i dunno why, i just luved it..the words, the flow and the meaning, they were all just so good. You are such a good writer!

Hmm, not sure I'm getting all of the message but there is wonderful imagary anyway.

I know someone just like this. It's heartbreaking. He can't see that he is his own worst enemy, and that he needs to stop and come back to regain his joy.

Beautifully written. Simplistic, yet profound.

wow...this is really interesting, I love the portrayal of the man as a sin. I must say that I love the whole thing, it's nice, short and to the point, and you get your point across well. Keep writing. -Justin-

i thought this was another great poem. however as you said you could have developed it a tiny bit better. as for the new world order i applaude your enthusiasm and am happy to say unless you do not forefill the specified critiria you will be given a place of power! =P

keep writing

~Godly Luke Staden~

Pretty piece, well done! Keep writing!

~Anna~

very different from what I've read, unique ^_^ short and simple..yet difficult? if that makes any sense to say. well good job and thank you so much for your review ^_^

This is really nice, I love it. "Acid kisses whisper cynical promises."

its well writtin, but i cant tell what its about really. my own fault in sure. cant say good or bad, sorry.

thanks for the reviews

I just wrote this, but I really love the way it came out. I mean it could be better. I love that I said everything that I felt at the time. It made me feel so much better when I wrote it, so I hope that you enjoy reading it. Reveiw if you want to, but thank you always for reading.

HUGS & KISSES