More deepness. I love the part about raindrops...
~Rae

Wow. Deep and lovely.

Hm, I'm a bit torn about this piece.

A lot of it was lacking the originality that your others had. Images like bottling sunshine for a rainy day, ocean and sand beneath your feet, and chasing rainbows are used a lot, and writing a name in the sky was an image you used before in this collection.

You did have some very good lines in this, though.

[and kiss the sky/with our eyes]
[and chew on clouds]
My personal favorites.

Beautiful piece, of course, just not the best of this collection.

~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)

I like how this incorporated a lot of elements from your previous poems, such as the clouds, the stars, the moonlight, and of course the last line. The image was very reminiscent of the last one. It made me wonder if this was a sort of a continuation with the same people.

[it might look empty but it's half full] That made me stop and think. I love when words can make me do that.

I'd comment on your whole "randrops" thing at the end, but I can see that plenty of reviewers have already. Simply lovely, though.

One line that really caught me was actually the first one. It's a refreshing image. I ave a feeling I've seen it used before, but somehow your use of it makes it seem so fresh and original. It's such a commonplace image that any reader can immediately jump into the scene, and the circularity it gives to the ending with the mention of "rain" gives this a nice, wrapped up feeling.

Wow, looking through your reviews, a lot of my favorite poets on this site have nothing but compliments for this. I'm quite surprised that I've never come across your work before.

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I have to say, the beginning didn't do much for me. It felt too conversational. I know that was the tone you were going for, and it was effective later, but it didn't immediately pull me into your poem like the other one did.

The second half is beautiful, thouh. It feels so innocent and childish that it implies so much more emotion behind it. The images it put into my mind almost made me forget the sadness of the beginning, just like she was trying to do.

Such beautiful descriptions. I could honestly pick out each line and tell you how much/why I loved it, but I'll settle for just one.

[and paint the rainbow in shades of grey] Such contrast and such a powerful image.

And behind all this amazing imagery is such a coherent amd meaningful message.

I can tell I'm going to throuhly enjoy this collection.

~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)

"paint the rainbow in shades of grey" -Interesting line.
Unique and enjoyable to read. I like the ending! :)

"let's catch orange sunsets

and place it in a jar,

saving it for a rainy day."


SO LOVELY. I envy your talent.

Wow that is completely gorgeous.. my favorite (so far)
You truly have a way with words.

Love them. They have such passion and honesty, they're beautiful.

I'm not sure how the others feel but the use of "&'s" instead of "and" can be slightly annoying.

Wow that was completely gorgeous! I loved your word choice and imagery.

I would love opinions from a writer like you on my work. It would really mean the world to me.

raindrops never afraid of falling?
that is wicked stunning.
really. i'm favoriting for that line.

ohgod, imagery!
amazing.

this is too too sweet. the words are perfect and so very well-structured to the poem's flow.