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| shinco 2007-01-26 ch 1,  | abuseok, gotta go, but I gotta say this! This was awesome, just like all the others! I loved the onomatopoeia (wow, what a word! lol) and the imagery! GO SHAZAAM! |
| Femme de Dieu 2006-08-30 ch 1, | abuseSadly, so many of us are parasites, not due to choice, but circumstance. I am one of the extremely fortunate souls that gets to work from home (on the computer transcribing other people's thoughts), and so am able to take breaks from time to time to read great poetry such as this! Truly, Tourterelle |
| FunkyFlower17 2006-08-07 ch 1, | abusea lil wonky with the rhyme scheme. but overall, beautiful imagery :) ~mez~ |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-07-16 ch 1, | abuseThis has some lovely twists and spins. You work the contradictions in so effortlessly the reader almost doesn't notice them all. Wonderful sound. Well written. |
| e a t i n g . f l o w e r s 2006-07-14 ch 1, | abuseholy cow...this is amazing! i love the way it just hits and runs. the words are very stark and realistic. my favorite line has to be "sunlight casts it's delicate kiss" and lots of the rhyming makes me happy b/c i'm challenged at it. : ) but keep it up! |
| simpleplan13 2006-07-13 ch 1, | abusei like this... the metaphor is awesome and the descriptions are great.. well done |
| Safira 2006-07-05 ch 1, | abuseA rather negative view of a corporate career and humans, but nonetheless a very interesting one! Until now I have only been aware of "the concrete jungle" and your addition of "the urban parasite" - one that is to be described as beautiful - very intriguing and unique from my perspective. Autumn. |
| breezy nostrils 2006-07-05 ch 1, | abusewow that's the best poem by you so far! at least i think so. you have impressed me :P we should totally write a collaboration together if you want. like a poem. anyway, talk to you soon. |
| poetic abortion 2006-07-05 ch 1, | abusethe imagery is probably the part i liked most of this poem but i also just loved the last three lines and just the whole thing entirly. "beautiful parasite" - Jesus, i love that title. iamsojealous. ~* Noelle |