|Reviews for Heart on the Fang|
| Daranak 12/22/10 . chapter 13
Hi! I don't know whether you're still active on Fictionpress or reading reviews, but I decided to write one for this story given how much I enjoyed it.
First, I cannot compliment you enough on your prose and characterization. Especially for Raul – his lack of knowledge of and awkwardness around other humans and their customs might have come across as unrealistic had this story been written by a less skilled writer, but you pulled it off perfectly. Yes, I'm almost green with envy.
Second, I was really impressed by the amount of small details about your setting you put into this story. Mundane objects, the smells of nature, horsemanship – either you did a superb job of researching before you started to write, or you're an incredible natural at this. Have you ever considered seeking to get published? Because your writing is IMO superior to that of many professional fantasy authors I've read.
Still, there's a few things that nag me about this story. First, why did the raiders/slavers come so far inland to capture prey? Second, after they'd chased off Raul, why didn't they take his cloak and bow before fleeing? Were they afraid he'd be back with reinforcements?
| Kiri Hanna 10/2/10 . chapter 13
this is so good. You need to update!
| InspiredVisionary 8/5/10 . chapter 13
oh no, you cant just leave it there! whats gonna hapen? please please update- i know you havent for a while, but i love your stories about the wolves. please reply bck if you're still alive to tell me if you'll ever finish this or udate, thanks! -from another big fan-
| kam-westlake 2/26/10 . chapter 13
i like the story so far! i was glad to find that Raul was still alive but i still want to know what happened to him that night and see him go back to his family! so i am hoping that u will update this story soon!
| violet-eyez 8/13/09 . chapter 13
oh no he trusted the wrong man, what's going to happen to him?
| izzyx3 7/11/09 . chapter 13
i just read fear not the wolves and found this story as well. this story is really good so far! please update soon! :D
| xInkMusique 6/30/09 . chapter 13
No! Will they ever meet Bryony anytime soon? Thanks for the update :)
| anon 6/30/09 . chapter 13
Woho! An update! That said, I like your style. You seem to have mastered the art of using paragraphs (rare here on fictionpress) and you actually bother to describe things (in terms that aren't annoying). I'm also rather fond of the relationshipe between Rhian and Raul. It seems really truly sweet without being saccharine. You rock. That is all.
| anon 6/6/09 . chapter 1
Please consider updating this story. There is so much potential here. There are interesting and developing characters as well as a well-paced plot.
| grumpirah 1/14/09 . chapter 12
| CJC 12/26/08 . chapter 12
I like it. Keep writing please?
| NSQ 6/22/08 . chapter 12
It's been a very long time since I've last checked for a new chapter, but I've not forgotten this story. I'm pretty sure I never left you a review, either, which is just indecent of me. In any case, I hope to make up for it with your subsequent updates.
I enjoy your style very much. The words you have written reflect the relationship between Raul and Rhian so beautifully - I can just feel the up-and-down, the tentative, delicate, curiously anxious. There seems to be a great deal boiling beneath the surface here, and I'm looking forward to when it all overflows.
Your characters are the draw; your writing is wonderful - keep on keeping on. :)
| val 6/14/08 . chapter 12
YES! Chapter 12! Thanks for updating.
Oh...the wolves are coming this keeps getting better and better! :D
| Kjersti 6/12/08 . chapter 12
An adorable chapter. I hope Bryony and the others will help Raul though, and not just "bring him back".
Rhian and Raul are so incredibly sweet. Although I think Raul *would* understand the concept of love if Rhian just had the guts to talk about it with him - he loves her already, doesn't he?
| SnoopyWanderLust 6/11/08 . chapter 12
It's amazing how far you've come as a writer. This chapter made me feel everything with both characters.