Very nice. All angsty and such. I love that. The first stanza is particularly striking. Nice job here. Keep writing! :)

the opening was so clever,
and the closing was so heartfelt.
very beautiful.

lord, that last stanza is pure bliss.
it hits home, i guess you could say.
wonderful, wonderful.

*ugh* Envy's a deadly sin, isn't it? Drat. lol

And I think I see a trend here. Are all your poems so good??

-dances.with.sunflowers.

Felt slightly cliche, but I enjoyed the end.

My god I can relate to that. Perfect.

my only complaint is the lack of a 'g' on 'smilin'. It kind of throws the mood of the peice for a second... unless you were going for that 'ironic happy' feel, which I reread it as and found it really worked.

The beauty of it all is that it is so poetic; and that, I think, makes you want to bleed.

lovely opening.

you speak everything that i can't find the words to say.

i really like this poem/poetry compilation

best stanza=

"if i tried to forget you, would you still remember me?"

its very true ^_^ good work

I love the first poem, it's really meaningful.

Woah, this is incredible.

In the first three stanzas you use past tense for the ifs and present tense for the thens, that seemed a bit odd to me.

The fourth and fifth stanza just seemed to be phrased a bit oddly. What to do for you to come back, just sounds odd to me. In the next one I think "so why did..." would sound better than but.

Anyhow. I liked the piece, though I kinda withed the fourth stanza was a question because I really loved all the questions you had in the piece. Especially the whole if and then thing, that was really interesting. My favorite part though was the ending with you forgetting and him remembering, that was really interesting.

I love it, very nice work. You're from the philippines too? Aba ayos. We could be friends :)

beautiful, i like the last verse the most =)