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| Take the Money and Run 2008-02-23 ch 1,  | abusethe idea and symbolism of this poem is really nice and unique, i love this! the first line in the second stanza confused me for a second, did you mean "off" instead of "of"? other than that, it flowed really nicely. Great job --SB, review marathon |
| Pen Filled Ink 2007-07-22 ch 1, | abuseNice poem, it was nicely portrayed & the simplistic language & imagery you used fit it well. I took the thorns to be a metaphor for the bitter side of love. I loved the phrase "don't hurt so much for me." it's catchy in a subtle way because it's a phrase not often used & really set the mood of the poem. In the first stanza, the repetition of that phrase seemed very redundant, however. Also, instead of "take blood", i think "draw blood" would be more appropriate. There are a couple more grammatical errors but overall it was a well done piece. |
| SwitchVale 2006-11-14 ch 1, | abusePretty much speechless. Wow. |
| Dveyoni 2006-11-03 ch 1, | abusefasinating, truly now u r speaking of a person correct? a strong willed person perhaps (@ lease thats what i think) |
| Pacnad 2006-10-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseThis is an amazing poem! The hole, no scratch thing is uplifting and brings a feel of somewhat safety. |
| Grene Lefe 2006-08-12 ch 1, anon. | abuseRose Thorns is good poem, too, and i think people can relate to this too |
| Tenaya Sovann 2006-08-08 ch 1, | abuseyou're so good at poetry...and at fiction writing :D I really like this poem of yours. Keep up the good work, hm? |
| Every Thought 2006-07-19 ch 1, | abuseThis is my new favorite poem from you. It's amazing, the way you wrap up each section... I especially love, "And to your dismay, I'll still be here." Stunning work. Hope to hear from you soon,- every thought |
| Crazy Talk 2006-07-18 ch 1, | abuseI did like this poem...and rose thorns can't really hurt. Not when they are attatched to such beauty. The pain caused by the thorns can be ignored for the sake of the sight and smell of the blossom. Crazy Talk (Ozzy) |
| UnfilteredWater 2006-07-10 ch 1, | abuseWow I can only say one thing: Amazing |
| Godly Luke Staden 2006-07-08 ch 1, | abusesorry i havent reviewed this quick enough, i thought i had! i liked it however i am confused to the meaning. i liked it but i dont know what the rose/thorns are metaphors for. any way it is really good i mean really good, and i am gonna put it on my favourite stories! keep writing ~Godly Luke Staden~ |
| kris345 2006-07-06 ch 1, | abusewow, you are amazing, and i now have to read all of your other work, hey and thanks for your reviews, they made me smile. but still wow. :) |
| anamellie 2006-07-06 ch 1, | abuseit's nice and your concept is unique... keep it up! :) |