good poem, sounds like there is some forced rhyming though, but still good

Great flow, awesome write.

It's really pretty! You've misused you're, though. Everywhere you typed you're it should've been your (without the contraction). "You're" "you are" so when you read through your writing, replace you'res and yours with "you are", and if the sentence still makes sense then "you're" is the correct form. If it doesn't make sense, "your" is the correct form. :) Other than that minor technicality, very nice poem. Great imagery.