|Reviews for The Inner Man|
| killersoda57 4/13/13 . chapter 2
I was looking at some of your other story's when I happened across this one, and let me tell you it's amazing like your other story's I look forward to reading the rest when I have time.
| Xofder 6/12/12 . chapter 52
I also really liked the scientist. His type of character is always my favorite and is only rivaled by Chikos .
| Xofder 6/12/12 . chapter 53
First of all I would like to sincerely thank you for making this story. It would be an understatement to say I love is really well thought out and planned and extremely actually be able to write in this stlye is actually very demanding and it really shows your talent in doing so. It is actually very difficult to take up and write stories of this magnitude and that's not even commentating about Shift. I really liked how you combined the school life and the action seamlessly together in your story and it probably will inspire some of my own stories (not that i'll actually write them but the ideas will be there). I would really love to read a sequel of this story because there was one thing that I'm not sure if it was addressed and I missed it or something like that. It was Chikos fear of stairs. I have to say I really liked that plot device all main characters should have weakness and vulnerability and that was a prime example. That's not the only reason that I would like to read a sequel though I really think that it would be absolutely fantastic, just so you know that I would definitely read it and support it. Thanks once again for your works and I really hope I didn't miss the part were Chiko's fear of stairs was addressed.
| Van Quatra 5/12/12 . chapter 52
definitely needs a sequel, hopefully some years later, it should make highschool interesting since chiko grows up normally like the doctor said. should be interesting.
| mynameisnoneofyourbusiness 4/9/12 . chapter 2
wow this is so great. i've only been to the second chapter and i'm already addicted. *sighs* too bad i have magors exams coming up the ones that determine your life so i won't be able to finish as soon as i wanted. BUT I WILL PREVAIL IN THE END HAHAHAHA ... LOL
| Van Quatra 8/7/11 . chapter 53
this was a really, really good story. i very much enjoyed the action and the violent comedy of the leg kicking. you did an excellent job. great work.
| Kiyoshi Seven 12/11/10 . chapter 47
Pretty heartwarming after all the drama and commotion, it actually struck chords in my heart. Commendations on it. The story is well paced something in which am finding much enjoyment and to tell the truth you kept me guessing alot thus far. I hope it will one day be watchable. Thanks for a great read. Constructively critiscising is to a few spelling errors that made me lose some sense till taken in contectsual sense...heh...
| Tomoyuki Tanaka 1/31/10 . chapter 7
Aw...damn...they found him so soon. I hope Chiko escapes somehow.
Mashiro is hilarious, as usual. I love the part where he reads off Chiko's script "No thanks to that stupid doctor!" and everything else. Mashiro RULES! Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha! He's the MAN.
What else...man, that was one hell of a cliffhanger. As I said, I hope Chiko escapes somehow. Can't wait to read the next chapter now, but I've other priorities. Damn. Damn school. Sigh oh well.
Just to let you know, I might be writing another story soon (the one I was telling you about) so I'll let you know if I actually finish and post it up. Heh. It might even replace Absolute Zero altogether, but I'll see. Heh.
Till next time!
| Tomoyuki Tanaka 1/27/10 . chapter 6
Ha ha ha ha! Another funny chapter! You know, I just had this idea where Chiko really loses his memory and believes completely in this fake visage of Kohanna and really thinks of Mashiro as her daddy. That would be hilarious!
| Tomoyuki Tanaka 1/17/10 . chapter 5
Muahahaha! That was a fun chapter. Really.
It's funny how people are staring at him, including Haruko and the four girls (Haruko? Same name as Hiroshi's senpai in my story, ha ha!) who seem pretty mean.
Mashiro comes to pick him up today...has he noticed about someone watching Chiko? I wonder.
Can't wait to read the next chapter!
| Tomoyuki Tanaka 1/15/10 . chapter 4
Ha ha ha! That was funny. Mashiro really is the funniest character in this series. The story he told and how he ended up making the whole class weep in sorrow was just plain hilarious. I can't stop laughing whenever I'm reminded of it!
Who's the man beaten up and interrogated? Poor guy, I feel sorry for him.
| Tomoyuki Tanaka 1/10/10 . chapter 3
That was like, the most hilarious thing I've ever seen! An ELEMENTARY SCHOOL math teacher trying to compete with her eight-year-old student? WHAT THE HELL? HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
I still laugh when I remember that. Man, that was solid gold. The way Chiko just answered her math questions like they were nothing, and Shimasuke going crazy just to beat her...that was the best comedic scene I've ever seen in a while.
And Mashiro at the beginning of the story - "I have something important to tell you." HAHAHAHAHA! That was hilarious too!
I'll continue reading next time!
| Tomoyuki Tanaka 1/7/10 . chapter 2
Bwahahahahahahaha! That was hilarious. Really hilarious, I can't say anything much. The damn doctor with his crazy imagination. Magical girl genre? Magical girl genre? Is he kidding me? Don't tell me Chiko will be able to cast spells or something next. That's just hilarious!
And ouch. I feel sorry for Mashiro. To be hit by a physically enhanced girl like that must hurt. A lot.
And what's with the fear of stairs? That was just so random! Ha ha ha ha! And the preview was funny too. Did Mashiro catch the disease from the good doc? Will read more next time!
| Tomoyuki Tanaka 1/5/10 . chapter 1
Ha ha ha! The preview is hilarious!
Oh man, your story is long. Really, really long. And there are 53 chapters! O_O I'm going to take way, way, way longer to read this than Shift. Uh oh. And school is starting next week too. There goes all my time. If I try reading one chapter a week, it'll probably take me a year. I'll do my best, though!
Back to your story, this is really original and creative. It was entertaining and you're right, that last part was just divine irony. And I like Mashiro. I hope he doesn't die with the other bodyguards. Till then!
| Blinking Cursor 4/5/07 . chapter 39
Episode 20 Part A & B
Hello there! The troublemaker is here! Wee…Ahem. Let’s get on the review!
No offence okay, it is just a one-person point of view after all, but frankly speaking, the part during the ”car chase” was a little bit too elaborate. It nearly took half of the ‘Episode 20 Secret Part B’. The point is, not every brain has the capacity to concentrate on specific subject for a long time, the brain needs diversion, and in this case, you gave too much attention on writing the scene. I salute your dedication in doing so, the great length you went through just to make it sounds real. But you know, the brain will eventually get exhausted, and the lack of dialogue/conversation doesn’t help the situation at all. It drives the brain to just scan or skip the part and gives an idea that it is ‘dull’ when in truth it is actually amazing. Yes, I think it is amazing, but after reading it twice. It is hard to keep up with the action. For a brain which is lacking ‘imagination’, it will wander off to something else. So, it would be better if you omit unnecessary information, you know it would look tidier and keep the story balance. It is still a good chapter though, very informative and nice towards the end. (oh…I hate Rachel…she is back…)
In the aspect of sentence structure and grammar? I’m awesomely bad at it, so I wouldn’t know if you are good or not. English is not my first language after all… But I think you are good, I kind a admire you! He-heh! Chayo! Chayo!
All the best!
I apologized if I’d offended you! I’m not sure if this makes sense at all. Yeah, kind a messy!
XaVieRa, _ , 2007
P/s: I still love the preview part! He-heh! XP I used too much space again, huh? Sorry...