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| The Revenger 2008-04-17 ch 1,  | abuseDid you just end the story like that? Wan't expecting that... I thought it was sorta tacky when he was like, 'I love you' but then it sort of fell into place when she, well, when the story ended. It's really sad...*sniff* But you did a good job on the writing and stuff, it was well put together. |
| Whisper of the Winds 2007-10-18 ch 1, | abuseAw...sad and sweet |
| Black Viper 2007-08-26 ch 1, | abuseawsome.. sounds a bit wrong to say that about a story that's about suicides but it's really awsome.. |
| ghostless87 2007-03-01 ch 1, | abuseFirst off, I'm not sure you can be emo and goth at the same time...two very different movements and lifestyles. Emo is trendy, by the way. Goths are not suicidal or depressed. Writing style was bland, story and plot has been overdone a million times. |
| Suze-Booze 2006-12-29 ch 1, | abuseHm, I think your idea was pretty interesting, but this is a website open to all sorts of reviews, or almost... right? Me being your friend or not, I will criticize this story like any other websurfer you might not know. The first sentence bothered me most... Pascy, you aren't emo. you aren't so why bother writing these kinds of stories anyway? You don't always wear black, and you're not always sad... i just don't think this is what you should be... okay, maybe i didn't exactly say that last part as an anonymus websurfer, but you get the point, right? Love you lots, Suzie ^_^ |
| anon 2006-12-08 ch 1, anon. | abuseThis is truely bizarre. The premise is ok, but only just. The characters are so incredibly stereotypical. The girl is no different from anybody else, she just wants to be. The lines across the page are cheap and a terrible excuse for writing. Perhaps putting a little effort in would improve the reading of this. Perhaps taking time to write properly, descriptively and in an imaginative way, instead of doing what all the other children on here do. The subject matter has been done to death, and always badly. |
| Yuki 2006-07-10 ch 1, anon. | abuseWow... I like it. very interesting...in a good way. Love, =D Sad ending though. Love the description. My fave type of stuff to read. |
| paper ink flowers 2006-07-09 ch 1, | abusexoxo pascy, a great story, as usual! make sure to read and rate mine, kk hon? |
| Mephi 2006-07-09 ch 1, | abuseThats so sweet... Yet extremely twisted... |