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Alyssa 2008-03-10 ch 5, anon.	abusel am so serious when l say this would make a great movie. lt could use a little more scenes. and maybe a prequel part. showing them in heaven falling in love and the battle. lt would be a great movie, and l know it will most likely never happen, but l can't wait to see it!
crazyaznkid 2008-02-25 ch 5, anon.	abuseNext time you wish to write something biblically based research better. Remember, the bible is one of the most influential peces of literature ever to have graced this earth. So many great authors have cited, alluded, and made reference to it. The least you could do is get the stories right. And don't think i reprimand with the feeling of my faith being slighted (far from it). I just don't like a good work being spoiled.
M. R. Roland 2008-01-15 ch 5,	abuseNice. Very, very nice. I absolutely love the ending. Keep up the good writing. I can't wait to read more of your stories.
denise 2007-12-30 ch 2, anon.	abusethis story sounds great! i was a little iffy reading it because im ignorant about the bible and sort of like to keep it that way but its really going good here!
Kaycee 2007-09-14 ch 5, anon.	abuseInteresting story! I loved it. :) G'job, hon'.
Genato 2007-08-07 ch 5,	abuselurved it.
nonabugg 2007-07-05 ch 5,	abuseAwe, I thought this was really cute and pretty original. I loved how God had personality and wasnt just this blob, and how Ria was an artist...in the way that she helped create the world. Fate had a personality that was spunky too. And even Satan/Luc took on a completely different edge. Great job!
NyAngel85 2007-05-19 ch 5,	abuse=D i love it, fight scene wasnt half bad, wasnt all that great, but it shouldnt have been violent, it was just right for them
Erisah Mae 2007-05-11 ch 5,	abuseHeheh, love it! A little sacriligeous, but hey, I enjoyed it! God as a "skater dude" was also highly amusing... The only thing that i would pick on is the easy reconcilitation... no way would Satan change back to Lucifer that quickly- I mean, he's had millenia to build up the personality, and suddenly he has an instant reversion? Assuming that Celestial psychology resembles the human stuff, there's a little I don't think so about the whole situation. Even so, I enjoyed "Fate" and I thought the ending was fairly good, considering... IN other words, nice job! Erisah
incandescente 2007-02-27 ch 5,	abusewow. it ended. short story, but it got where it was supposed to be. my only peeve is that.. god spoke like a kid. but hahaha i guess he's dressed like akid, so yeah.
incandescente 2007-02-27 ch 4,	abuse"He was the Prince of Darkness, The Fallen One, the being that even God had trouble contending with." the pride in him.. is obvious. good description of the angels in their real form. (:
incandescente 2007-02-27 ch 3,	abuse“Hell is the stop before Heaven. It’s time to get back on the train.” this story is interesting, like what i've said before. but there are things to get right as well. okay im just rambling, because i know that i screw up historic moments as well.. perhaps we can use this story to encourage each other to research carefully! (: fate is quite a cunning woman.. seemingly without morals. i dont know whether to like or hate her. oh well. i guess stories must have a gray villian of some sorts..
incandescente 2007-02-27 ch 2,	abuseI have but one qns. if the god in your story is god.. then he should have at least some semblance of control, is it not? then.. why are every one treating him like he is some fool? "he is not happy." "I did no such thing! His exact words were ‘No matter how hard they search, one shall never find the other.’ The two had finally given up on ever finding each other and stopped searching."
incandescente 2007-02-27 ch 1,	abusedefinitely a twisted plot. "When two of the Archangels, the four commanding generals that answered only God Himself, fell in love, God forbade it and demanded they stop disobeying His law immediately." Perhaps it can be cut into two sentences, making way for clarity. "a head full of memories that did nothing but haunt, and a heart that loved but was not loved back." I liked this line, really. this story interferes with my principles, and at first i reacted quite strongly, and asked myself many qns. but in the end, it is a story, and i will treat it as such. firstly, i do believe that you have to include an idea, like how the angels rebel? the word "trusted" and "beloved" tells me that they were in god's service for a long time.. so how and why they decided to disobey, and reject what they had from him? if you do include this, it would create a much clearer picture of the story. i choose to not believe that the God i know is so.. merciless. but then again im telling myself this is a story, and so i should get over my hang -ups. interesting..
MB 2007-01-27 ch 2, anon.	abuseYes! They met! I love it. :) Onwards to the next chapter...

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