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| an-entraced-pyromaniac 2006-08-13 ch 1,  | abuseo...k i like it but just a wittle to confusing |
| nadorj 2006-08-13 ch 1, | abuseWOW this is really good! i totally know where ur coming from!! |
| Sythiro 2006-07-19 ch 1, | abuseActually this poem isn't random, it actually does make sense to me! Sythiro |
| mizu no kokoro 2006-07-16 ch 1, | abuseinteresting. you described the feeling of confusion very well. good work keep writing |
| poetic abortion 2006-07-10 ch 1, | abuse"I yell i have lost my dreams" - I see a booboo! I think it is grammatical (unless on purpose because, you know, stylistic differances and stuff like that). I'll say I found this promising. Very promising. But cliche; I have seen this overandover and while style sometimes makes substance fresh this was still apparently cliche. I think that line really spoke the problem withn this, even when I am cought between liking and just letting it slip through the meter. "Nice" fits to a near exact level. Keep writing. ~* Noelle |