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| an-entraced-pyromaniac 2006-08-13 ch 1,  | abusegood on urhyming to i like rhyming |
| nadorj 2006-08-13 ch 1, | abuseNow wait r u talking about the war or boyfriend troubles? either wy i like it! |
| Leaving Here 2006-08-01 ch 1, | abuseit rhymes! lol... i could never do i rhyming poem. I have tried and let me tell you, it was sad... lol kk-- i loved this.its very true. keep writing! :)~Liz |
| Mettermi A Dormire 2006-07-21 ch 1, | abuseCute...but a little TOO rhymey, threw it all off. But it had a great point. |
| tesa131313 2006-07-20 ch 1, | abuseit confused me a bit. it was a good poem though. it was ok |
| Sythiro 2006-07-19 ch 1, | abuseThis is brilliant keep it up!Sythiro |
| Lemon Sorbet 2006-07-12 ch 1, | abuseBlunt and to the point, I can see what you're trying to achieve with this. I like it, keep it up! Lemonsausagex |
| poetic abortion 2006-07-11 ch 1, | abuseFrankly, I don't get what you have said in your reviews, which I am taking as replies to my one review to your abysmal poem - correction: abysmal is not the word I was looking for, I merely think in that poem in particual you could have done so much better. My review wasn't a flame; I gave you a critic on a poem you didn't do too well and that, might I add, I said I liked but felt that the way it was handled wwas rather "Blegh, I've seen it done and done again" But I didn't say: This sucks, stop writing. No, I didn't; that is the definition of a flame - an unhindered comment neither helping or boosting the writer. I am sorry if I offended you, all the same. Should I just end this with "Oh. My. God. Youareawesome."? No, because there is still this iffy bit of style over substance or vice-versa. I am imprsed by this, yes, the message is strong and clearly represented in tone, title, and in every single line that makes this poems shape has the allusion or word BOMB written proud, boldly, unhindered. I truely agree with what you are saying, it is a message that I think would have been more suited in a genre called War but the politics seems to add a more haunting appeal to it. Brass, unafraid; this poem has a voice and is a far step up from the last impression of you [Innocence, I believe]. Well done; keep writing! ~* Noelle |
| Princess-anna57 2006-07-10 ch 1, | abuseFascinating! I really like this! Keep writing! ~Anna~ |
| poemkitten7 2006-07-10 ch 1, | abuseWow, I totally agree with what you're saying. I like your rhyming and how you keep the lines short and to the point. Very nicely written. Keep writing! :) |