Yaoi...

Totally unexpected.

^^

I like that.

Sana update ka pa ng iba.

^^

...Dude! Total twist. lol. I guess I should've read the summary huh? lol. It's so sad though.

Aww! Poor guy! I was wondering if Gabby was actually a guy...and then I got pulled into thinking, nah, that's daft, he's a she...and then...WHAT!? GABRIEL!? AWESOME! ^^ I love litte stories about male/male...maybe I'm a freak...oh well, freak by name, freak by nature. Nothing wrong with being that way...right? Anyways, I adored this and I hope one day you make more from it!

Sailor Derek x x x

Oh, I thought Gabby was a girl! I was getting a bit ** at the end when Luke asked for an introduction to a girl. Now I found out that Gabby is a boy! Nice!

Firstly, thanks for the review ^-^ *big smile and a cookie for you* Don't worry, I'll continue the story.

Anyway, OMG! Absolutely, fanstabily incredible!! I can't believe that Gabby's a guy! You really managed to pull that off! I'm never gonna get over that now, huumph.

O, so you're filipino, I know that kdramas and kpop is big over there. Are you into that stuff? (Yes, I am weird, I ask everyone that question)

Anyways, keep writing, i think i'm going to come back for some more another time

^-^ Ciao for now

LOL! nakakatawa yang kantang yan.

*ahem*

anyway im here for a review. but if you've found my reviews for other people scary, don't worry, i just wanted to insert a comment, not a full-blown critique in here.

i like Gabby's character, even if he was gay. the emotional power that he projected was very raw, and that's one of the first things i look for in a good read. thumbs up! but sometimes yeah, guys can really be so insensitive, so forgive them (lol, us pala) if we do that sometimes; it's how we are.

as for grammar and everything, no problems, you write coherently and nicely. you have a good eye for pacing and i like how you let your words flow as if of their own accord to make a really engaging story. considering this was your first entry in Fiction Press, i'm quite inclined to be impressed.

a lot of your contemporaries hate me giving a comprehensive critique, but i don't do this to gain reviews; i honestly just want to improve people. if you want, i can look over some of your work (lol, that FLUNK sure looks hilarious... i think i encountered an anime just like that)--especially because you're Noypi like me.

dami na plng Pinoy d2, lol.

anyway be seeing you sometime soon~

~DD

XD OMG, I that Gabriel was a girl! lol T-T That's so sad, rejected by someone who doesn't even know you're in love with them. ^^; I have issues... >u< Oh yeah, and the next few chapters of my stories are UP! You should read them. x.x;

Man,I thought that Gab was a girl or something...king of sadbut it's a nice story

... dots are fun! aw man no offense but i liked it better when i thought he was a she...

elow naidz!! nice one!!

one lok and then yun iba na.. malagkit dumikit ang mga mata.. one smyl iba ng ibig sabihin.. di na frends ang tingin ya skin.. aheheh

aw man. so sad. quite a twist. i thought Gabby was a girl! instead "she" was a "he!"

good work!

Ha! I knew it! Very simple. Quite funny. I know that from Gabby's POV it's not, but life IS ironic and corny in that twisted telenovela sort of way--one could either cry his eyes out or just shrug his shoulders and laugh along. Anyway, good piece of writing. I suppose the little twist at the end came unexpected for those who didn't know the song. Awesome song. Kudos to you! =)

woah. that was a good short story. keep up the good work !

i was pretty surprised that gabby was a boy ! haha. you put it in pretty well.

and i love that song by parokya ni edgar because its so funny and this story could be the story for that song. good job !

Gabbys a boy!

You did good. Throughout the story, I think, okay, he is going to profess his love for her, and then when her asks about the other girl, I feel a little sad.

Then when I find out Gabs is a boy, I feel really sad because he might never get to be with Luke.

Anyway, this was well written and I enjoyed it.

oh gosh! i didn't realise that it was a slash until the end, i think you pulled this one off rather well (: it's really angsty and quite well-written. i enjoyed it.