i'm soso happy to hear from you again! i love the title & summary to this; it just grabs you. the poem has this nice off-rhythm, & the pace seems to stumble when it goes into the third stanza, but it kinda works. i think it's a little simple, & you've used the eden allusions enough, but besides for that this is lovely.

kait

i love this - it's different from a lot of other poetry you write, and that's what makes it amazing. it's just perfect.

wow... dark, sad, maliciously beautiful. reminds me of a situation i'm in, awesome work

keep writing!

it leaves me wondering really, quite a bit.

almost like adam and eve are somewhere in there, deeply encrusted.

lovely noelle, havent heard from you in a while