This. Is. GREAT!

^-^ There's a typo near the end, which says, 'My bodies battered', when I think you meant, 'My body's battered'.

Bodies is plural, indicating more than one besides your own. Body's with the apostrophe gives ownership to you, meaning it's your body and no one elses.

=D But this writing kicked some serious literature butt! =3 It is now going into my favorites. X3 Thanks for writing this, and can't wait for Pt. 2 to come out!